Citing primary and secondary sources

Examples of paraphrasing are taken from the Richmond Law Library,  retrieved from https://law-richmond.libguides.com/c.php?g=998384&p=7227189 on Oct 19, 2021)

 „Paraphrasing is simply a way of putting someone else's ideas into your own words - it does not make the idea your own“.

Make sure that your paraphrased text is 100% written by you using your own words and the original author of the text is properly referenced.

Original Phrase (example)

"Western law begins with two major subgroups. One contains the legal systems of the European continent. Although there are many differences among European legal systems, they are all descended from the law of the Roman Empire and were influenced by the procedures of Medieval Roman Catholic canon law."

Source: Dorothy H. Bracey, Exploring Law and Culture 31 (2006).

Improper Paraphrasing (example)

Western law has two major subgroups. One is the legal systems of Europe. There are differences between the European legal systems, but they are all descended from the Roman Empire and influenced by the procedures of the Medieval Roman Catholic law (Bracey, 2006).

OPEN QUESTION: What is the problem with this paraphrase example?  

Proper Paraphrasing (example)

At first glance, it can seem like the legal traditions of European countries are all very different. However, as part of one of the larger subgroups of Western law, European legal systems largely share a common origin in the Roman Empire and Medieval Roman Catholic Church law (Bracey, 2006).

OPEN QUESTION: What has changed in this example?